This tutorial was mainly focussed on the essay. I wanted feedback on chapter 4 and the conclusion as these sections were the ones Simon hasn't read. The general feedback was that I could be using too many quotes for information that could be put in my own words. Instead of using large quotes I should analyse and interpret the information myself.
The conclusion needs revising as currently it is an evaluation of each chapter. Instead, it was advised that I answer the question succinctly, discuss successful gender neutral design and the reasons why it is successful, then finish with gendered designs and why they are successful too. The conclusion of the entire essay is not ultimately yes or no, but rather sometimes yes and sometimes no.
The practical element is open to a lot of evaluation and discussion as lots of primary research has taken place. A body of writing needs to be included within the submission to explain the practical experiment and what the results show (separate to the synthesis paragraph).
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